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Oh my gosh I loved it. Usually I don't read poems but since you asked I thought what the heck. And I'm glad you did. Wow! No crit. I can't ...

I really liked it, but I am too wondering what was going on inside the guys head as well. I did not see anything to crit about. Good job. Can't ...

I really thought that part was funny too. I'll be posting agian soon.

I liked it. Very amusing and I can relate to the character. I didn't see any mistakes besides the ones that everyone else did. Can't wait to read more!

I have been thinking the same thing just haven't got to it yet. LOL!

Well, the first sentence is a major run on. I like the story so far...it's really good. I agree with Meshugenah and DarkerSarah on the errors. Can't wait to read ...

Once again...good job. I didn't really see much that was wrong, but I'm not really in a critting mood. Can't wait to read more.

:D LOL! Okay first person is where the main character is telling the story saying like I did this and I did that. You know what I mean? And then ...

If you are going to write it in third person then yeah it would be a good idea to use her name in the first paragraph. What do you mean ...

Wow! I just loved it...but I agree with the Meshalidar on the grammer. Maybe you should condsider getting someone else to edit your stuff. Good job. I can't wait to ...

Yeah I'm Kayla! Okay, the reason that I asked who was telling the story is b-cuz in the second paragraph you started it out with she and that kind of ...

Where did the man with the hood come from? Was he in chapter one and i missed it? It's is getting better and better. Hey check out my story called, ...

Yeah, I am the Kayla from Real Kids. Who is it that asked me? Thanx for critting...I should be posting chapter one real soon and can't wait to read more ...